Jasmine Hart

Thanks Jiggity. I'll look at changing it for my next two-didn't write one yesterday so it's two for today! :)

Hey Kit, I love the rhyme and rhythm and the idea is an interesting one but I do think that you should expand more on the character/story. I love the ...

I'm torn. I love how the story unfolds, but it sounds more like prose to me. I'd take; "one day she came home having witnessed her mother die and she ...

Hi, You're right, this is a bit mad, but I don't think that's a bad thing! You have some beautiful imagery here, and I especially enjoyed; "Walking into the night ...

Thanks so much Demeter! Poem III Attempts To Adjust I constantly tilt my head to one side hoping the water will drip out my ear, but I am to be ...

Hi, I really enjoyed this. It flows nicely and I love how it seems like a love poem and turns unconventional at the end. The last stanza in particular was ...

Hi, You have some great lines here. I really enjoyed; "And the moon made brighter by our twin smiles" "And feel the beauty, the textures of this place, this universe" ...

Ok. I lied. I will post, I will...I'm just unsure as to how to get back into this...

You write so beautifully :) Rom 3:12; This flows very nicely, and I love your imagery, especially; "our shadows colour the graveyard and, as we inch closer" "he spits at ...

Hey Clau :) Good to read you, I've missed your poetry. I'll have to go against you and Kylan, I thought "dribbled out like piles of sticky notes." was a ...

Ok so my aim at the moment is to have three sections, ten poems in each, twenty-one lines in each poem. Let's see how that goes! Also I'm experimenting with ...

Great :) I'll post tommorow if that's alright.

Hi, Welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here. The first thing I'd do is rate this in your title, as I don't think it's suitable for younger readers. ...

Hi, Welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here. You handle the form perfectly. I love the title. I'd avoid twisting the syntax in the first line as I ...

Dudes, I'm so sorry, I totally forgot about this! Are people still up for doing this? If so just give me a shout and I'll post. :)